Note: Since I wrote this review last year, PT Reade has revamped and re-edited this book. The latest version is top notch–as is the rest of the series. —Kerry
The hero, Thomas Blume is an hard-drinking American ex-cop with a tragic past. He returns to New York from London to interview the man suspected of killing his wife and son. Being a former cop, he is coerced into helping NYPD Blue investigate the apparent suicide of a former girlfriend. The incarcerated head of the local Russian mob doesn’t want him anywhere near the case. Cue lots of action, car chases, and shoot-ups.
The story proceeds at a fast pace with loads going on. In general, the author handles the threads well,
Minor format changes are needed as the para indents, which are probably acceptable for a paperback, are far too deep for the smaller kindle screen.
In general, the copy editing and proofreading are okay with no major errors noted apart from above mentioned indents and a few unnecessary additional line spaces, which weren’t too annoying.
However, the manuscript is in need of a good line edit. Filtering, passive voice, use of filler words, and over explanations abound. And this did rather spoil my enjoyment. Basically, I didn’t really feel as involved in the action as I wanted to, and that was a real shame.
Overall, the author shows promise and I wish him well.
This review won’t descend into a treatise on writing, but I’ll give one example of filtering in first person prose:
- I could feel the wind on the back of my neck, it was very cold, and it ruffled my hair.
- A gust of wind chilled the back of my neck and ruffled my hair.
#1 Filter words are in bold. I’ve also included passive voice and and a filler word in there too.
Sentence #2 No filtering.
Which sentence do you prefer? Neither is incorrect and preference is a matter of personal choice.
Thoughts on cover art: Classic, gritty cover that suits the genre.